Jasmine Hart

Hi.Welcome! I hope you like it here. Like Scottie, I sometimes do a quick profile to get me started. I find that storybooks are really great practice, especailly RPGs (Role ...

I'd stand in the downpour, ( I'd omit the comma here ) Until twilight if you asked. Heavy drops of inky-coloured rain, ( I'd get rid of "coloured", as I ...

This is a really lovely piece. I agree with Amelia about the spacing. I love the alliteration of the first line, it sounds really melodic, which is appropriate for the ...

I adore Plath! (Love isn't the right word in this instance, I just idolise her and marvel at her...and I could go on and gush over her, but I'll try ...

I love them! I'm listening to "Like you" at the moment, actually...anyone know when their new album is out?

Notes

Sparkle

Sharon I paced agitatedly across the hall, the phone pressed to my ear. "No, that's not what I'm saying at all! What I'm saying is....no! You're not listening to me! ...

Brigid I knew that what Siofra said was logical. However, I also knew that Anchorless wouldn't neccessarily be inclined towards logic. "This is crazy." I whispered. "There's too much at ...

Keturah "So Fawkes it is then." I muttered, picking up my pace in the hope that he would fall behind. I'd never get anything done if he insisted on gluing ...

Several thousand words a day is amazing. Well done!

Well done! I'll read it too if you like.

Keturah "I do if we keep walking." I told him coldly, "though,whether or not I want to tell you is a different question altogether." I fully expected this to cause ...

Brigid I hesitated. I always hated waking her, not for the sake of wanting her to sleep. We'd become used to disrupted nights by now. Indeed, I would have thought ...

I'd like my character to be a suspect too, if that's ok. Name: Sharon Coffey Age:22 Hair:Black and wiry, cut in choppy layers, hangs limply just below her shoulders, and ...